I was pondering whether I wanted to go slightly fantastical with it and have the street/girl disappear, but I think keeping it grounded as a slice-of-life realistic fiction works better. I didn't quite expand as much as I think I could have on the other items, and somewhere in my mind I thought of the bank being passed on as needed, but fleshing it out would've been another 500 words or so :P
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Date: 2013-10-24 10:19 pm (UTC)Thanks for reading!