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Talon ([personal profile] talonkarrde) wrote2010-12-18 05:00 pm

Brouhaha

It’s studied in school nowadays, you know. They make the psych students sign a release, informing them that they know the images will be highly disturbing, and then they show them everything.

The projector flashes through a timeline, showing the students the cell phone and DSLR pictures from shortly before it happened, the three videos that recorded everything and weren’t destroyed, and then a composite sequence with a death toll in the corner rising as each minute ticks by, based on what the investigators were able to reconstruct.

Many of the students vomit.
 
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It starts at 7:22 p.m., and the Knights have just scored a touchdown. Out of the fifty thousand spectators, some thirty-eight thousand of them are local and rise out of their seats, a human wave; the noise is immense and can be heard across the river, downtown. The ESPN cameras pan and follow the wide receiver that caught the pass, number 37, and follow his joyful victory dance and salute to the crowd. The band starts to play their touchdown theme, and the camera zooms back out, to encompass the entire section of the stadium.

There’s a hundred foot screen up there, in clear view of just about everyone, and it displays the score, showing the home team up by 3 now; and below the score, there are occasional twitter messages that give congrats and shoutouts.

At 7:24, there’s a message that says the following: @vendetta: the bombs are set. goodnight, fuckers.

On the two spectator feeds, you can hear a couple people wonder how that made it in there, but someone comments that idea that someone was just smart enough to get a stupid message past the censors, or maybe they selected the wrong message to post. Most of the crowd doesn’t even pay attention to it, as the QB’s setting up to start the next play.

At 7:25, the power flickers in the entire stadium; and when they come back on, the floodlights that illuminate the field start going out — except for the sign, the only brightness left, the only thing the eye’s drawn to. And now it starts flashing between two messages, the first one and this one:

@vendetta: and in the light you will behold the glory - not of the lord, no. but look for the poison gas.

There’s confusion at this point, wondering what’s going on; the crowd is a bit more tense but not panicky yet, and you can hear people urging calm and peace, that the lights will be back on soon. In one of the cameras, the one recovered from the right side, about thirty rows up, you hear a male voice crack a joke and then ask the concessions employee for a hot dog as he waits.

At 7:29, the lights come back on. Exactly twelve seconds after that, as the announcer is saying that the game will continue despite unfortunate ‘technical interruptions’, there is a greenish gas that is spraying out of every single section, spaced out to be every ten rows down.

The death toll counter increments almost immediately - a John Doe, never identified, has a 9mm glock handgun on him, and though he is three seats from the exit he begins firing immediately, shooting six and climbing over their bodies to get to the exit; it is later found that he runs to the bathroom and proceeds to commit suicide.

Across the stadium, there are more people trying to fit through the exits that can possibly fit, and injuries and fatalities rise as any sense of humanity is lost. Even without the video feed, as tears slip pass closed eyes, the sounds persist, an unnatural, horrifying racket.

At 7:32, on the ESPN video, you hear a voice saying ‘cut the feed, cut the fucking feed’, and someone in the studio does so; there’s no one manning the camera anymore.
 
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At 8:09, two thousand, four hundred forty-five people are dead. One of the cameras has been dropped and stepped on but you can still see the horror of an exit through the broken lens; the other one is rolling, pointed at the field, where people jumped to escape.

Broken glasses. A bloody trumpet. A phone showing a failed call to 911.

At 8:14, the unmanned ESPN camera shows a team of EMTs and paramedics come into the declared hazmat zone, ignoring the prohibition, and start triaging and treating. By the end of the triage, they run out of tags, and start marking with markers on foreheads. One of the dead is player #37.

At 8:25, the hazmat team comes in and finds out the bitter, terrible truth.
 
 
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The congressional investigation ended with this line: “This attack took the lives of more than two thousand civilians and was accomplished with the use of a twitter account and thirty cans of colored, compressed air. There were no bombs, no weapons of mass destruction, and no motive. We have no recommendations at this time.”

[identity profile] belgatherial.livejournal.com 2010-12-18 10:50 pm (UTC)(link)
You know, you keep upping your game. Every single week. Another excellent piece.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 12:48 am (UTC)(link)
thank you for the rec, again! I'm glad I meet your standards :)

[identity profile] belgatherial.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 12:50 am (UTC)(link)
Meet?!! More like exceed spectacularly, week after week, after week!

[identity profile] furzicle.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 12:33 am (UTC)(link)
Very powerful!! Don't give anyone any ideas!

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 12:49 am (UTC)(link)
once I had the idea - it felt entirely too familiar, too plausible, and it was creepy just writing it.

[identity profile] applespicy.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 12:34 am (UTC)(link)
Damn. Just, damn.

[identity profile] applespicy.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 12:54 am (UTC)(link)
Loved it!

[identity profile] drjeff.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 01:38 am (UTC)(link)
This completely kicks ass. Chilling and awesome.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 04:00 am (UTC)(link)
I figure if it passes the psych-believability test from you, it's golden, right? :P

[identity profile] takenoko.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 03:33 am (UTC)(link)
Everything about the way this was set up and presented is detailed, focused, and painful to read. In a good way.

[identity profile] edith-jones.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 03:50 am (UTC)(link)
Wow! How have I missed reading your entries before? I will be back now that I've seen your imagination at work. This was awesome and gets you a vote from me.
-Allie.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 04:43 am (UTC)(link)
thank you!

[identity profile] basric.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 08:52 am (UTC)(link)
This was very well don. Excellent writing.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 04:43 am (UTC)(link)
thanks!

[identity profile] myrna-bird.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 09:14 pm (UTC)(link)
I am never disappointed with your wonderful entries.
You are a horror-master in your own right (aka write)

Have you happened to read Stephen King's CELL?
It's a goody!

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 04:57 am (UTC)(link)
I have not, though I've read several of his other pieces; I'll look into it.

And I don't like horror! Sometimes, though, it seems like I can't avoid it ;)

[identity profile] myrna-bird.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 03:10 am (UTC)(link)
I'm guessing one does not have to like something to do it justice. You are a very talented writer!

[identity profile] the-vernacular.livejournal.com 2010-12-19 11:31 pm (UTC)(link)
Mass hysteria!

There is nothing to fear but fear itself! Brilliant post. This was amazing, and I feel like the part at the beginning, about psychology students, should be a tip off. But it's not, not until the end, and then you sit back and think, oh, shit.

That is what terrorism is.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 04:59 am (UTC)(link)
yeah - and what scared me a lot in writing this was how plausible it seemed. sure, the numbers may be off slightly, and it might take more than a minimum of effort - but of what use would bomb sniffing dogs be against this? or x-rays? it exploits the mind, and I don't know what protections we have against it.

and then, if pulled off, what would happen to other sporting events? would they keep going?

[identity profile] the-vernacular.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 05:24 am (UTC)(link)
It sort of reminds me of the mass hysteria plots that the Joker concocts in the Dark Knight movie, where he intends to get people to kill each other just by scaring them shitless! I can totally see it happening, because people just go into survival mode, as soon as they think it's them or someone else, people are going to try to make sure it's them.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 05:28 am (UTC)(link)
absolutely - and while I loved that movie from top to bottom and think it was amazingly intelligent, I think it would've been more likely that the two boats would've blown each other up.

if you're curious, the two pseudo references that came to mind while writing this were this insight talk (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RyMdOT8YJgY) and this NPR article (http://www.npr.org/2010/11/23/131535263/cambodia-s-death-toll-rises-to-378-in-water-festival-stampede).

[identity profile] the-vernacular.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 05:38 am (UTC)(link)
I'd heard about the Phnom Penh stampede, but the video I hadn't seen before; that was brilliant! I was watching that and trying to figure out if it was real or not. It was that plausible.

And I agree with you. Actually, I was expecting the boat of "innocents" would blow up the boat of "criminals." Because they would decide they had a right to live and the criminals didn't.

[identity profile] tigrkittn.livejournal.com 2010-12-20 09:48 pm (UTC)(link)
Thoroughly creepy!

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 04:42 am (UTC)(link)
mmhm! not something I intend to write too often, but it held me and wouldn't let go!

[identity profile] tigrkittn.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 04:43 am (UTC)(link)
I'm glad it did, so we all got to read it! ;)

[identity profile] joeymichaels.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 07:52 am (UTC)(link)
This is a nice metaphor for state of fear we live in this decade. Well done.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:16 am (UTC)(link)
thanks! now tell me, how do we stop it and make things okay again?

[identity profile] joeymichaels.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:20 am (UTC)(link)
Something needs to happen to send the pendelum back the other way, but its not going to be nice.

[identity profile] lawchicky.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 05:44 pm (UTC)(link)
So creeeeeeepy! You get me every week.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:56 am (UTC)(link)
:) thanks for reading!

[identity profile] nyxocity.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 05:52 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow. Just wow. Masterfully told. By the time I'd gotten to the end, I'd forgotten about the psych class, and then it all suddenly clicked. One hell of a twist. Bravo!

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:57 am (UTC)(link)
I like my twists. Possibly too much sometimes, but I'm glad it worked ;)

[identity profile] snarkerdoodle.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 08:32 pm (UTC)(link)
That this is so incredibly "this could actually happen, *just* like this" believable bring the inherent creepiness to a whooooole new level. I got to the end and went "well, don't think I'll be attending any large venue events anytime soon, nope..." ;)

Awesome job on this. (Though that is no surprise, since I've loved everything of yours so far, lol.)

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:56 am (UTC)(link)
(oooh, high praise; that means a lot to me)

Though if you don't go to those things, the terrorists win! Less facetiously, there's a lot to be said about maintaining a way of life and not being afraid and what is security theatre and entirely too much to post on here.

Erm, what I mean to say is thank you! :)

[identity profile] majesticarky.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 10:40 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow creepy! I like how this reads like a news report.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:22 am (UTC)(link)
I thought it'd be the best format to portray it. thanks!

[identity profile] kittyfaelis.livejournal.com 2010-12-21 11:33 pm (UTC)(link)
I raced through the comments, just trying to figure out if this was a true story )even though I wondered how I could have mised that).

Amazing, amazing writing!

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:21 am (UTC)(link)
i think the scary way of putting it is to say 'no, it hasn't happened...yet'

and thank you!

[identity profile] lilycobalt.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 12:12 am (UTC)(link)
Wow! This was truly frightening. It does seem like it could happen, especially the conclusion about the congressional investigation.

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:19 am (UTC)(link)
-nods- I think it was more a entry where all the pieces were there and I was just putting them together rather than one where I had to make things up out of thin air.

though I think the investigation would have some token observations — be more careful, ban compressed air, have more searches — but essentially, the point remains — how do you stop someone that causes fear, panic, and death without using any weapons?

[identity profile] locknkey.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 01:38 am (UTC)(link)
Fabulous!

[identity profile] talon.livejournal.com 2010-12-22 05:18 am (UTC)(link)
thanks!