I can see how it could work that way, the homeless guy approaching someone after a show; I think maybe part of the problem I have with this is that it isn't what he's doing this time. I can't tell who it's supposed to be directed at really-- lines like "if you saw me on the streets" pretty much say that he isn't addressing someone while standing on a street (or it implies that; I suppose he could be, but it really isn't worded very well to reflect that, if he is). Maybe I'm annoyed with him asking for change because it seems like there isn't anyone to ask, since it reads like he's... writing it down, or speaking to an interviewer, or something.
I did notice the connections, although only in the vaguest sense at first; I didn't necessarily think of them as expanding on those stories or even being in the same universe, I just noticed the slight similarity. This probably just says I wasn't really paying attention, so I dunno why I'm mentioning it.
Expanding could be both good and bad. Since the middle is the part I like the most, the last line really threw me off-- even though the middle is the story of the homeless guy and how he got there and all that, I was reading it as kind of a separate story in itself since the asking for change bothered me even just in the beginning. I was just reading it as a time-travel story that could be coming from anyone, rather than a really really elaborate "so here's why I need money" story. Expanding would probably mean I'd see it even more as a separate story... okay, here's an example, since I don't think I'm explaining very well. It's like the Princess Bride. When you're watching the movie, it's a fantasy movie and that's it. No one watches the entire movie and remembers through every single scene that it's actually a grandfather reading a book out loud. I don't read this and remember that it's a homeless guy telling his story to someone; the ending is like when a scene cuts off and returns to the grandfather reading.
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Date: 2008-08-31 08:58 pm (UTC)I did notice the connections, although only in the vaguest sense at first; I didn't necessarily think of them as expanding on those stories or even being in the same universe, I just noticed the slight similarity. This probably just says I wasn't really paying attention, so I dunno why I'm mentioning it.
Expanding could be both good and bad. Since the middle is the part I like the most, the last line really threw me off-- even though the middle is the story of the homeless guy and how he got there and all that, I was reading it as kind of a separate story in itself since the asking for change bothered me even just in the beginning. I was just reading it as a time-travel story that could be coming from anyone, rather than a really really elaborate "so here's why I need money" story. Expanding would probably mean I'd see it even more as a separate story... okay, here's an example, since I don't think I'm explaining very well. It's like the Princess Bride. When you're watching the movie, it's a fantasy movie and that's it. No one watches the entire movie and remembers through every single scene that it's actually a grandfather reading a book out loud. I don't read this and remember that it's a homeless guy telling his story to someone; the ending is like when a scene cuts off and returns to the grandfather reading.