Again, word limit kills me. I'm glad you liked it, though it got (rightfully) trounced by the competition (http://mahmoth.livejournal.com/18248.html).
I think you're right, the nature of the piece is actually that it would be better expressed as a timeless, era-less piece rather than, say, the common day; it would allow more connection to the piece by making it less restrictive.
Not quite sure how much I could expand the timeline more though, because an integral part is the division of the relationship (and dance) into three specific, separate, steps. Of course the reality is that the steps blend, but...for the purposes of this piece, I didn't want to do any blending.
The one thing I think I would change is the ending, I feel at the same time that it's complete and yet not complete enough. I like the terse quality of it, though I feel like it needs to be drawn out more - the pause right after the end of a dance, if you follow. But I'm not quite sure what the words should be to describe it.
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I think you're right, the nature of the piece is actually that it would be better expressed as a timeless, era-less piece rather than, say, the common day; it would allow more connection to the piece by making it less restrictive.
Not quite sure how much I could expand the timeline more though, because an integral part is the division of the relationship (and dance) into three specific, separate, steps. Of course the reality is that the steps blend, but...for the purposes of this piece, I didn't want to do any blending.
The one thing I think I would change is the ending, I feel at the same time that it's complete and yet not complete enough. I like the terse quality of it, though I feel like it needs to be drawn out more - the pause right after the end of a dance, if you follow. But I'm not quite sure what the words should be to describe it.