Open Topic - A Long Walk

[talonkarrde]

Hey guys, this is me trying something, well, completely different.

This is going to be a story about the choices a person gets to make on his journey for redemption. It draws in some on a few of my stories that I've written, but the special aspect of it is that you get to make choices yourself. 

The entry is here.

I apologize for the external link; I couldn't host it here, and I'm still working out some kinks with making sure everything's working.

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Edit: Bugs fixed! Associations Restored! I am (probably obviously?) not the world's most amazing coder, and I apologize for the delay :P

Comments

[tijuanagringo.livejournal.com]

interesting. for my personal tastes it was a bit too like a game, i.e. fast, sudden choices and movements, rather than a long, lingering fiction experience like war and peace or les miserables (yeah I saw the jean valjean loaf of bread reference)

but having complained, now I must say that I am pleased to see the concept moving forward. I am old enough to remember the pocket books where you chose you actions and went to one page or another and those never really pleased me either, I just wanted to read lord of the rings or science fiction

all in all, however, I must thank you for a quite enjoyable experience.

[talon.livejournal.com]

And thank you, sir, for that tremendously valuable feedback. I think it can (should) certainly be much longer - I imagine something that would take closer to twenty minutes to play through would be better.

I think the shortness is a fault of mine and not the medium, though at some point the decisions need to be made sure they're meaningful and not just to stretch things on, but there can certainly be much more than just one or two decisions establishing a player's morality (or lack thereof!).

That being said, though, some of the abruptness, some of the choices will always be restricting and sudden - and so the question in the end is whether being able to pick your own path is worth more than being led through the author's one 'true' path.

Again, thank you for playing, and for commenting!