ext_18757 ([identity profile] xo-kizzy-xo.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] talonkarrde 2011-02-28 09:00 pm (UTC)

I love how you made the narrator into the onlooker. It adds that indefinable "something" that makes this more than a simple boy-met-girl piece :)
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