Actually, if you've read any of the discussions theafaye and I have had in the Green Room, I tend to prefer plot-driven story to character-driver story (though I can appreciate both). I didn't think it was a detriment.

I am at my grandpa's 90th birthday so I don't have time to do serious concrit right now but I'll try to give a really good read-through tomorrow and let you know. Do you want me to crit it from the perspective of being a complement to Stacey's story, or should I crit it as if it's a standalone? Because I think it does change the approach.